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The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the population of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The above graph represents the proportion of different
species
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 of
turtles
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 in India for the time period between 1980 to 2012. the different types of
turtles
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 are shown by lines of various colours.
Overall
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, olive ridley
turtles
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 were in majority and showed an increasing trend throughout the years,
in contrast
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 to
this
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 leatherback
turtles
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 were least found and diminished in subsequent years. green
turtles
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 and
overall
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species
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 of
turtles
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 showed a stable trend and their population remained almost the same in
this
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 time period. Considering all the
species
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 to be 100 in 1980, Leatherback
turtles
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 rose and their number peaked at 110 in 1987
then
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 fall gradually with every year to touch the value of 50 in 2012.
While
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 olive ridley
turtles
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on the other hand
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 followed a rapid incline from 100 in 1980 up to 140 in 2012. Green
turtles
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 remained almost the same with about 100 inhabitants from 1980 to 2012.
Similarly
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, the population of
overall
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species
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also
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 remained constant.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words species, turtles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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