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Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why?

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Some
people
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 believe that country investment in developing path system could have more flaws,
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 others suppose that enhanced public transport structure is more useful. In my opinion, more finance should be involved in increasing the number of buses, subways and trams,
than
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rather than
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 promoting better options for personal autos. First of all,
it is clear that
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 more public transport can carry more
people
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 which will reduce traffic jams.
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, if
hundred
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people
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 are driving to the centre of Riga with their machines, they will probably waste some time crossing the bridge. In case all the hundred will commute by bus, the bridge will be empty and no jams appear.
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, buses and trolleybuses are
traveling
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travelling
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 through a personal road
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 empty almost all the time. Where the train runs on rails and only decelerates at the stations.
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, less count of mechanical vehicles on the roads reduces air pollution.
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, if more
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 prefer to use trains
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 of automobiles,
this
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 will significantly diminish the volume of poisonous gases produced
as well as
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 decrease the amount of gasoline consumed.
This
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 will possibly lead to the global costs of oil reduction.
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, developing ways and high-speed roads will jeopardize human life even more
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 the boost of car accident occurrence. The more vehicles are running, the more bumps might appear, so the less security on the road
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.
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 why improving the roads and highways won’t be a better option.
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, developing path infrastructure will have more drawbacks, providing more risks to car crashes and increasing air pollution.
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 is because enhancing public lines will be a better option for a bigger number of
people
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 transitioning and maintaining higher security on the road.

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task response
Ensure that your arguments directly address the question prompt. Pay attention to maintaining a consistent and well-structured response throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
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lexical resource
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grammatical range
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Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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