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Some systems require students to specialize in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school? What are the benefits of two education systems and what is better?

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These days education systems develop and have multiple choices to teach
students
 so, some people think
that is
 good for
students
 when they
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need
 choose the best
way
 they can learn,
while
 others believe
that is
 new these days.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On one hand, studying a limited
range
 of
subjects
 from the age of fifteen can not teach
students
 a lot of information.
For example
, when
students
 learn a limited
range
 of
subjects
 they can get knowledge about any subject so, that's why some think
that is
 the worst
way
 to teach
students
.
On the other hand
, studying a wide
range
 of
subjects
 is the best
way
 for
students
 development for jobs.To illustrate , when a student studies many
subjects
 until they leave school it makes them ready for university.
Hence
 the belief
that is
 good for
students
.
In addition
 , studying a wide
range
 of
subjects
 is a new
way
 for
students
 and hard.For an instance, when
students
 study a lot of
subjects
 make they are stressed, but after that can develop skills.
This
 proves clearly that
this
 is the best
way
 for
students
. In conclusion, after analysing both points of view, I believe that if studying a limited
range
 of
subjects
 with study a wide
range
 of
subjects
, the student has chosen to take the good
way
 to study.In the end, I can say
that is
 new for
students
 and some
students
 do not like
this
.
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