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Percentage of people consuming fruits vegetables in the UK

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The UK is the most famous destination. The above chart shows the percentage of the
population
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 in the UK who consumed the recommended daily
amount
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 of
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 in 2002, 2006 and 2010. The chart has been categorised into 3 people i.e.
women
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,
men
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 and
children
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. In the year 2002
men
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's daily
amount
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 of
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 is 22%,
women
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's daily
amount
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 is 25%, and
children
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's daily
amount
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 is 11%.
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, they have mentioned the
population
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 for 2006 and 2010. As compared to the year 2002 to 2006,
men
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's daily
amount
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 of
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 has
been
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increased from 22% to 28%,
women
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's daily
amount
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 has increased from 25% to 32% and
children
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's daily
amount
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 has increased from 11% to 16%.
This
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 shows that between 2002 to 2006 i.e. 4 years there has been
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an increased
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increased
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 in
population
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. When we look at the
population
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 for the year 2010,
men
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's daily
amount
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 of
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 is 24%,
women
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's daily
amount
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 is 27%, and
children
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's daily
amount
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 is 14%. The following chart shows that the
population
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 of the UK goes up and down and it
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 matters to the productivity of the products.
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