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today many people are travelling. why? what are the benefits to the traveller?

#people #traveller
Travelling is an activity that most
of
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the
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people
 enjoy. In recent times, many individuals can easily
travel
 whether it is for higher education, business or visiting family etc. in
this
 essay, we will elucidate the reasons
about
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 the increase
of
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travel
 and
it’s
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its
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 benefits in the following paragraphs. To start, the increase
of
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travel
 has made
convenient
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it convenient
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 for individuals to do various
kind
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 of activities. With the ease
in
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 visa and immigration processes,
people
 can
travel
 and get
less
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 hurdles in their process of application.
In addition
, the taxes and the price of tickets have
reduced
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 from the past era which
also
 decreases the cost of goods that are imported or exported. To exemplify, there are many nations
such
 as Thailand,
Indonesia
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and Indonesia
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 which offer
visa
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visas
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 on arrival for
the
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tourists.
Hence
, the above example vividly illustrates the reasons for increased travelling. To address the second question, there are many advantages a traveller gets
such
 as they get the opportunity to explore
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the culture, cuisines and traditions of the country. The traveller even gets to broaden their knowledge.
Furthermore
, they even get a chance to start or expand their business to other countries which profits them. It
also
 helps them to have a change of environment by spending time with their family and
have
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a
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peace of mind.
For example
, it was reported in a survey that
people
 who travelled were more confident in initiating spontaneous conversations than others.
Hence
, the afore-mentioned reasons substantiate
merits
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 of travelling for the traveller.
To conclude
,
with
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the ease of visa procedures and reduced prices of
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tickets
has
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 benefitted
people
 to
travel
 more than
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 past.
On the other hand
, individuals have various advantages when they
travel
such
 as they get time to spend with their family and
also
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 to know about various nations.
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