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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller

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In
this
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 more than
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 past. It could be
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 spending or visiting friends,
family
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and family
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 in another country, exploring a new place for a novel experience etc. In
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the reasons in detail with relevant examples in the subsequent paragraphs. Travelling is an activity that most
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people
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 cherish. The recent increase in travelling
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 the previous times is
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 the ease
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 immigration services.
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 tend to get visas conveniently without any hassles that might be
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hurdle
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 in their application.
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,
people
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also
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 get the opportunity to expand their business to certain nations which requires their frequent
travel
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 to various countries which was not easily possible in the previous era as flights used to be quite expensive and
also
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 exporting and importing used to have
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rate
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 of taxes as well.
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, there are many nations which do not require any visa or have
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 on arrival like Thailand, Indonesia etc.
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, the above example illustrates vividly illustrates about travelling in recent times have been easier. To address the second question, there are various
benefits
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 for the traveller
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 as expanding their knowledge or horizons about the place.
People
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 can learn about the cuisines, culture and currency of the nation which motivates them to explore more about the place. They
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practical experience about how the country runs and what rules and laws are mandatory.
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, they can
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peace of mind for their own sanity and get out of their comfort zone. In
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 learn about themselves and their strengths and weaknesses too. To exemplify, it was reported in a survey that
people
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 who
travel
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 more were quite confident in initiating spontaneous talk with others.
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, the
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substantiates
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 the
benefits
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 of travelling.
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, the
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substantiates
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 the
benefits
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 of travelling. To recapitulate,
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 in
travel
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have
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 raised than before
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 ease in visa services
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people
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are
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 able to expand their businesses. Travelling
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 has many
benefits
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such
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 as increasing one's own knowledge about the world and
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 an opportunity to explore more about themselves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Study abroad
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