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In the past, the role of a teacher was to provide information. Today, students have access to a lot of information. There is, therefore, no role for teacher in modern education. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days,
students
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 are able to access a lot of
information
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 in different ways and some people argue that there is no role for
teachers
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 in modern education.
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, I disagree with it because I think the role of a teacher is more than providing
information
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. Without any doubt, with the advancement in technology,
children
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 can get a huge amount of resources without any help from adults when they are able to connect to the Internet . Once they type in some keywords in the search engine on the Internet, a huge amount of related
information
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 about the topic that they searched for will pop out. They can learn a wide range of topics that they are interested in through different online platforms like Wikipedia.
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, never should we overlook that there are a multitude of drawbacks if we allow
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 to learn without any guidance provided by
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. The first problem that I can think of is that
children
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 have impressionable minds and they may be easily affected by inappropriate messages,
information
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 and values in the virtual world. Everyone can leave a message and comment in the virtual world. Kids may not know how to distinguish what is right and wrong
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 they are reading a lot of
information
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 on the web,and
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, they may need to use a lot of
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 to filter the
information
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 and there is a chance that teenagers will learn some fake knowledge from the web.
On the contrary
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, as
teachers
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 always prepare study
materials
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 for
students
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 and they would make sure all the
materials
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 are related to their study and the
information
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 in the
materials
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 is correct ,
students
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' studying efficacy can be increased.
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,
besides
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 passing academic knowledge to the
students
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,
teachers
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 are
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 responsible for teaching
students
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 different life
skills
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 at school, ranging from
time
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 management
skills
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 and stress management
skills
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 to communication
skills
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. These
skills
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 are vital for
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's development and they could not simply learn them through reading books or surfing the Internet. An experienced teacher would be able to know what kind of education methods and
materials
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 could help his
students
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 in the best way and he could always adjust his teaching method from
time
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 to
time
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 in order to fit the needs of different
children
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 and
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 definitely could not be replaced by a computer or mobile phone. In conclusion,
although
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students
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 are able to access different
information
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 in various ways without the help of
teachers
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, I still believe
teachers
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 have an important and irreplaceable role in education.
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