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ith the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, personal independence is too modern . Many public
say
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 "any data and conversation should be open for societies and the authority must not curb all humans". In
this
 essay, I will explain why I strongly disagree with
this
 opinion. Let's commence by looking at the first drawback of
this
 situation. It is unless all
information
 and ideas are completely open to capita
person
, any individual can steal from any bank.
According to
, it's led to all country's rates dramatically decreasing, and a lot of
people
 died.
Hence
, some
people
 can kill any
person
 for money. If these humans have all
information
 and ideas, they will destroy our world. It will lead to a single administration.
Hence
, if the best hacker achieves
this
information
,
this
 human can kill any
person
. Let's start by looking at the second disadvantage of
this
 situation. It is religious extremism.
Hence
, if the
government
 do not
control
 society what is watched or what is read, any
person
 can watch a different religious video, and they can be a terrorist. So, the
government
 always controls us. Apply, some
people
 disagree with that opinion. They think "no one must not check or
control
 us.
Hence
, we have human rights. " I completely disagree with
this
 view, because the
government
 all work for us.
To sum up
.
Government
 must restrict the different media
information
 and ideas.
Although
, they will be in
control
 of all
people
,
otherwise
people
 can destroy our world or be a terrorist. In my view, when we live in
this
 country, governments or other public servants can check or
control
 us.
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