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Hosting sporting events such as the Olympics and the World Cup can bring benefits to the host countries. How far do you agree with this statement? Use your own examples to support.

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The Olympics and the
world
cub
 are conducted by the
country
 and are said
as
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to
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 the hosting
countries
 .the hosting
countries
 have benefited from other
countries
 in the area of tourism and one of the members of the
league
 match the hosting
countries
 are directly entered into the
league
 matches .the
world
cub
 is conducted in the mass population so every
country
 has participated .the member of the federation in
world
cub
 has conducted the qualifier round so every
country
 participate in the qualifier round and come to the
league
 matches but the rule is not to fit the hosting
countries
 they are directly entered into the
league
 match .
for example
 in
FIFA
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the FIFA
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world
 cup of 2022 the
qutar
Correct your spelling
guitar
 conducted the
world
cub
 ,so the
qutar
Correct your spelling
guitar
 had no prerequisite they directly entered into the knockout
league
 matches . the hosting
country
 has financial benefits from tourism.
country
 from
the
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apply
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different region enters the hosting
country
 to see the
world
 cup matches and
also
 the
country
's name has been widely sounded to the large population .
for instance
 many western people did not know guitar after successively conducting the FIFA
world
cub
 .the many people travel to the
qutar
Correct your spelling
guitar
 and explore the beauty of the
country
 .
to conclude
 ,the hosting
country
 has pride in the
world
 cup match and the
country
 finically benefits from a wider population and the
country
 directly with the
world
cub
 big team with no prerequisite it somehow helps to improve the sport in the
country
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