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Some people today believe that the world's increase in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Other people believe that world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world's economy and society.

#people #world #population #crisis #growth #economy #society
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The
population
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 of the
world
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 is ever-growing. Some people think that
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 increase has created an unsustainable situation and it will lead to a global crisis.
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 others believe that only through an increasing
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 can the
world
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's economy and society develop.
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population
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 increase is not constant around the
world
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; the
population
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 is undergoing significant growth ,especially in less developed
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, and the continent of Africa is predicted to undergo the highest rise. Many individuals living in these less thrived
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 frequently face shortages,
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 as water, food, heating, cooking fuel and medicines, and people have to live in substandard living conditions by Western standards. With more inhabitants, these dilemmas will become exacerbated and helping these
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 may
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 create strain on the resources and economies of other
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.
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, many
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 are unable to reach their economic potential
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 a lack of skilled workforces. For these
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 a growing
population
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 can mean a stronger economy,
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 that, a better standard of living. Rising populations could not only lead to a growing demand for goods but
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 allow economies to expand. The problem is,
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, these
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 that are in need of labour forces and increasing demand are already the more developed
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 and they meet some of these needs by immigration and exporting goods.
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,
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 certain areas of the
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 are in need of larger workforces to develop their economies, the continuously rocketing
population
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 could potentially lead to a crisis within
countries
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 that already provide for their inhabitants.
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