Many parents choose to teach their children at home rather than sending their children to school. Do you think the benefits of home-schooling outweigh its drawbacks?

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modern era, many people hold a strong view that homeschooling is

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of sending them to school.

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statement is valid to some extent but I would say that homeschooling

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benefit as compared to

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for parents. First and foremost, parents do not want to send their kids to

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because they

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alone at home and sometimes they like to give the education to their infants at home so they can spend time with them

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can get a plentiful time to do study,

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can do study whenever they want and they do not need to follow any schedule.

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, some kids are not excellent in math but

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at home, they can obtain a lot of time to solve math questions

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of focusing on other subjects that they already have a firm good grasp on. There are

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some drawbacks of homeschooling that could not ignore.

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to grow academically and mentally than homeschooling. No doubt that there are more qualified teachers in school as they have excellent knowledge of all subjects

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can get better academic education

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practical knowledge.

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have large numbers of students

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can enhance their communication, teamwork and cooperation skills.

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them when they will work with teams in

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future. In conclusion, homeschooling is better if parents cannot send

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choice for their

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