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More and more students are going to another country for higher education. Do the advantage of this outweigh disadvantage?

#students #country #education #advantage #outweigh
Education
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 prominent factor in today's
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 life. There is
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 going on that number of students move to
foriegn
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foreign
 nations for
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higher
education
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To
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, the merits of
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 notion are clearly overtaking the demerits, Which will be enlightened below.
Most
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 significant reason
of
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pros
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 is
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this
, the
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independence
independency
 of
pupil
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the pupil
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. To elaborate
this
, youngsters when
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move
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 to other countries for
education
,
they
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also
 need to work for their livelihood as well. They do some kind of job
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simultaneously
 with their
education
 and take their own decisions for them. Another prominent factor is that they will
recieve
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receive
new
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 environment as well. They will meet other people, who come from other
culture
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 and
lifestyle
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. It will help them to learn more about others and grow
themseleves
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themselves
 as well. The dire effect of migration from own nation for
education
also
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 a con. The students would have to leave their hometown and their family. They have to stay from them for
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 period of time.
Due to
 that sometimes they have to face emotional difficulties.
Moreover
, by living
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 there would be no one
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 family who can take care of them.
To conclude
,
although
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youngsters
 have to stay away from their family,
but
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they will learn
alot
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a lot
 from
foriegn
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foreign
education
 and become independent.
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