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In many parts of the world, it is common for one parent to stay at home and raise a new born child while other works full time to earn money. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 concurrent era, it become a trend in
this
 universe to take
care
 of infants by
one
guradian
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guardian
 and another do a full-time job for wages. From my standpoint, the pros of
this
 notion are clearly overtaking the cons, which will be enlightened below. To commence with, there are some merits of raising a
child
 with full attention.
Firstly
, attentiveness is much more crucial for
new-born
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newborn
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 babies and parents are the first
who
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ones who
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always
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are always
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 ready for it. They can take
care
 of them like no
one
. To exemplify
this
, doctors
also
 recommend guardians
to
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take a leave from their work after their
child
, as infants
also
 need them in their initial year of life. In spite of
this
, new-born
also
 go through some medical conditions in their starting time and a mother already knew about her own body complications and babies as well. So, they can take
care
 of children more efficiently than other
like
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babysitters.
In addition
,
child
 love would
also
 incline with the person,
whome
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whom
who
 they are seeing from their first day.
Thus
, if parents do not take
care
 of them
then
youngones
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youngsters
 would feel detachable from them. There is
also
 a dire effect of working
by
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with
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 only
one
 parent. The prominent
one
 is that
,
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 the parent would feel burdened by doing hard work on
daily
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a daily
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 basis.
Due to
this
, they
also
 could not spare some time for their
child
 as well. In most cases, it would be a father. They could not connect with the young ones for a long period of time.
To conclude
,
although
one
 guardian has to work hard to run a family. But, it would beneficial for a
child
, because
other
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 parent provides proper security and
nutirition
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nutrition
nutritional
 value to them.
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