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Some people think that business,academic and scientific information should be kept private. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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 of people think that business contracts,
information
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 about education and their targets should be kept
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secret. I think that business contracts should be kept private
and
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academic
information
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 as well
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because each of us should be sure about our positions and just prove our acts with achievement. Nowadays each of us starts to be more
attentively
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attentive
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 about our future, education and direction. We start to do schedules,
planes
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and planes
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, make a deal with new companies and
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with
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everything with our society.
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example
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 if you will enter
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university
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a university
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 or work somewhere with good amenities, first of
all
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 you will go somewhere and
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with
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this
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information
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 with
you
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your
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 relatives and friends. But I think that we should keep our
life
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private
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because not everyone can be
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you like your parents, and be really happy
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 your achievements and targets. As regards academic,
scientific
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and scientific
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 data, we can
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with
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it
in
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them in
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 newspapers, magazines or networks because of salary or new useful
information
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 for citizens.
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example
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 if
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information
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 can do or force someone to be more active and change his
life
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positive
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 side we should
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our knowledge
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 because we can cause the world to change for
good
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the good
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 side. But if
this
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information
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about
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is about
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life
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the life
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 of another person or about
own
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our own
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life
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 we
can nor
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cannot
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share
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this
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information
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on
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 social media because of rules and personal rights. First of
all
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,all
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 if
this
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 individual permit you to do it,
after
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this
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 we can post
this
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 speech,photo and etc. In conclusion, it is vivid that there
is
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 a lot of types of data, and it
is depends
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 on occasion and
information
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 which can change
or
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your or
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life
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the life
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 of another person. We should be more careful about
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our personal
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life
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 and keep it
in
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private and
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with
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such
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 kind of
information
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 only with close people in our
life
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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