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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The below table indicates the police financial plan in 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain, and the pie chart demonstrates how the
money
 was
dispence
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dispensed
dispense
 in 2017 and 2018. As can be seen, the
budegt
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budget
 for National Government
and
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Local Taxes and other resources
are
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 getting higher in 2018.
For the
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 pie chart , it shows that the
money
 spent on salaries was three quarters in 2017. First of all, we can see from the table, it does not
has
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 too
much
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 differences
on
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 the budget in 2017 and 2018. But in 2018, the National Government and Local Taxes and other resources
are
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still cost more than
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a pervious
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pervious
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previous
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 year. Next for the pie chart, in 2017, the
money
be
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given
on
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 salaries was 75%, and technology was only 8% .
On the other hand
, the salaries spent in 2018
was
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decreased to 69%, but on technology , it
was
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increased to 14%.
Lastly
, the
money
 that
consumed
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 on building and transport in 2017 and 2018
were
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was
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 both 17%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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