The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The below table indicates the police financial plan in 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain, and the pie chart demonstrates how the
money
was
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dispensed
dispense
in 2017 and 2018. As can be seen, the
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budget
for National Government
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Local Taxes and other resources
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getting higher in 2018.
For the
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pie chart , it shows that the
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spent on salaries was three quarters in 2017. First of all, we can see from the table, it does not
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too
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differences
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the budget in 2017 and 2018. But in 2018, the National Government and Local Taxes and other resources
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still cost more than
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previous
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year. Next for the pie chart, in 2017, the
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given
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salaries was 75%, and technology was only 8% .
On the other hand
, the salaries spent in 2018
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decreased to 69%, but on technology , it
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increased to 14%.
Lastly
, the
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on building and transport in 2017 and 2018
were
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both 17%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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