The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The below table indicates the police financial plan in 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain, and the pie chart demonstrates how the
money
was dispence
in 2017 and 2018.
As can be seen, the Correct your spelling
dispensed
dispense
budegt
for National Government Correct your spelling
budget
and
Local Taxes and other resources Correct word choice
apply
are
getting higher in 2018. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
For the
pie chart , it shows that the Change preposition
The
money
spent on salaries was three quarters in 2017.
First of all, we can see from the table, it does not has
too Change the verb form
have
much
differences Change the quantifier
many
on
the budget in 2017 and 2018. But in 2018, the National Government and Local Taxes and other resources Change preposition
in
are
still cost more than Unnecessary verb
apply
Add an article
a pervious
pervious
year.
Next for the pie chart, in 2017, the Correct your spelling
previous
money
be
given Unnecessary verb
apply
on
salaries was 75%, and technology was only 8% . Change preposition
to
On the other hand
, the salaries spent in 2018 was
decreased to 69%, but on technology , it Unnecessary verb
apply
was
increased to 14%. Unnecessary verb
apply
Lastly
, the money
that consumed
on building and transport in 2017 and 2018 Add a missing verb
was consumed
were
both 17%.Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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