More and more people decide to eat healthy food and exercise regularly. What are the reasons for this trend? What can be done to encorage more people to eat healther and exercise?

In today's era,
people
tend to have nutritious
food
and do some physical activities
more
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than in the past. I opine that
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it is good for us because
technologi
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technology
is increasing day by day and
government
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the government
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provide
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public places.
To begin
with, the trend of a healthy lifestyle is more common in today's world.
Due to
technological development.
People
can get easily some healthy information on social
midia
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media
such
as
youtobe
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youtube
,
facebook
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and
somany
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so many
more not only that
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but
also
they get about nutrition and
phycical
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physical
activities. To
illustate
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illustrate
, some articles provide information about how to cook healthy
food
. making
people
follow and cook nutritional meals easier than in the past.
moreover
, the
intenet
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internet
can provide
informaion
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information
about the correct ways to do some
phycical
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physical
activities which
people
can
easlly
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easily
follow
to
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do so.
Thus
, now,
internet
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the internet
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provide
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provides
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so many things so
people
can do all things very easily. on the
outher
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other
hand, Physical
activites
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activities
activity
will increase and encourage
people
to follow
this
trend.
For instance
, the governments should invest in public parks and gyms which can help
people
to do more exercise and provide some equipment.
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to make
people
more
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exercise, companies should give launch free and
this
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programs keep companies for their
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. In
additionally
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, Provide an affordable cost of healthy
food
in order to ensure that they have an equal price with
past
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fast
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food
.
Hence
,
government
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the government
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should provide Public
area
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areas
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.
To sum up
, technological development provides information about the health of
people
which encourages
people
to do more exercise and cook healthy
food
. Taking support of
above
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arguments, The governments should provide public places for
people
and give knowledge to
people
of a healthy lifestyle.
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