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A friend has written a letter to you informing you about his or her plan to visit your country/city. Write a letter to him/ her. In your letter, write: what he or she can do in your country/city advise him about the place he could stay at suggest to him/her what to pack and bring while coming to travel to your country/city

#friend #plan #visit #country #city #place #pack #travel
Dear Jane, How are you doing ?
It
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hasIt
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 been a long time since we not
meet
Wrong verb form
met
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 each
others
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other
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 and
i
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I
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 heard that you going to visit Viet Nam next month. First of all, after you landed
in
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at
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 Ha Noi airport ,we can hang out and take
picture
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pictures
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 of the temple in the middle of the river in Ha Noi.
Secondly
, we visit some
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
 for you to stay overnight. In my
country
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,country
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 there are a lot of things you need to pack. The first thing is
camera
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a camera
the camera
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, it is good during the trip but it
also
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is also
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 dangerous when you carry
on
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it on
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 the street.
Second
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The second
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 thing is clothes. Respond
me
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to me
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 after you land
to
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at
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airport
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the airport
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. Warm regards, Your
bestfriend
Correct your spelling
best friend
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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