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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thought and ideas. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Artists
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 are known as the kind of people who work in a special environment, and
freedom
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 is one of the aspects they need.
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, some people believe that those should have the
freedom
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 to
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 their work effectively. In my opinion, I partly agree with
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 certain reasons. Take a look at the benefits that
freedom
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 brings to
artists
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. First of all, it allows them to get inspiration from the smallest things.
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, art students in my school do not need to wear uniforms like others.
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, they will be in a comfort zone and easily push their ideas.
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,
artists
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 usually express themself in many forms
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 as music, poems, or paintings, and
freedom
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 gives them the right to do that effectively. A songwriter,
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, cannot think about new lyrics if he is forbidden to show his
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.
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, he will totally lose inspiration and cannot produce anything.
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 just as everything has advantages and restrictions, so does
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. If
artists
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 are entirely free to do what they want, it might lead to a range of downsides. First of all, it may harm an artist's reputation. There are some people who are willing to mock others if someone doesn't support their artwork. When it does, it lowers audience spirits and shatters the reputation they worked so hard to establish. On top of that,
artists
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 can over the limit of laws if they are given total
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 and are punished.
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, if a singer sings too loudly to disturb the neighbours, he may be subject to an administrative fine. In conclusion, I believe that
artists
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 should only be partially free to do what they want.
Freedom
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 is not only good for their creativity but
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 trouble if they are transcended.
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Your essay provides a balanced response to the prompt, presenting clear arguments for and against the idea of total freedom for artists. However, make sure to fully address the specific aspects of the prompt and provide a more detailed development of your ideas.
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