Some people say that the best way to improve Vinsers’ health is by increasing the number of sports facilities at VinGroup/Vinhomes locations. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health at those sites and that other measures are required. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.
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this
fast-paced world, people tend to neglect the healthy life-style
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lifestyle
due to
their stressfull
work. Correct your spelling
stressful
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is even more precise in VinGroups employees, where
always keep a high Correct word choice
who
work-pressure
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work pressure
Therefore
, some people argue that the best way to enhancing
the health of Viners is Wrong verb form
enhance
facilitating
more Change preposition
by facilitating
Sport
grounds. Change the noun form
Sports
Althought
there are some points for people endorsing Correct your spelling
Although
this
opinion, i
stand with those Change the capitalization
I
think
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who think
this
will have a small influence on the
public health.
On the one hand, constructing more Correct article usage
apply
sport
avenues will have some Change the noun form
sports
merrits
in Correct your spelling
merits
term
of easier accessing Fix the agreement mistake
terms
as well as
increasing the
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apply
awareness
. Firstly
, an
hectic schedule is the main reason why Viners does not Change the article
a
excercise regurlarly
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exercise regularly
Furthermore
, this
intense schedule unable
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enable
them
to access the Correct pronoun usage
apply
sport
ground because it Change the noun form
sports
take
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takes
to
much time Correct your spelling
too
traveling
to these place. Change the spelling
travelling
Therefore
, a novel nearby sport
complex will be an Change the noun form
sports
idealy
solution for Correct your spelling
ideal
ideally
this
due to
its convinience
, Correct your spelling
convenience
accesscible
, Correct your spelling
accessible
state of the art
facilities. Add a hyphen
state-of-the-art
This
will lead to a more favorable
for those Change the spelling
favourable
whose
have an Correct pronoun usage
who
awareness
about sport
committing more with doing Correct your spelling
exercise
excercise
and those who not can have the Correct your spelling
exercise
awareness
about it via more intensesive
exposure with the Correct your spelling
intensive
constructers
Despite Correct your spelling
constructors
it
benefits, Correct pronoun usage
its
i
do not think Change the capitalization
I
this
solution can lead to a decrease of
the Change preposition
in
sedementary
lifestyle because the major reason is not solved. The main reason leading to Correct your spelling
sedentary
sedimentary
this
crisis is their stressful schedule, which is the barrier between them with an
healthy lifestyle. Henceforth, I think the targeted solution for Change the article
a
this
problem is increasing the
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apply
awareness
as well as
the promotion of portable work-out
classes. The former is more important because Correct your spelling
workout
like
the battery, the Add the comma(s)
,like
willing
to Replace the word
willingness
excercise
in each person will decrease Correct your spelling
exercise
through out
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throughout
with
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apply
the
time. It is crucial to Correct article usage
apply
charged
them with a new Change the verb
charge
freshing
work-out energy, which will keep them Correct your spelling
refreshing
maintained
their good Wrong verb form
maintaining
habbit
. For the latter ideas, Correct your spelling
habit
habits
an
portable classes via internet interaction or a small Change the article
a
classe
at their workplace will make them exposed more Correct your spelling
class
classes
with
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to
the
healthy Correct article usage
a
life style
. Correct your spelling
lifestyle
Such
Add an article
A such
The such
holistic
approach will make Viners more Correct article usage
a holistic
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committed
commited
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committed
with
the healthy lifestyle
In conclusion, Change preposition
to
while
there are some advantages in building more sport
avenues, Change the noun form
sports
i
am on the side Change the capitalization
I
with
developing other measures Change preposition
of
will
have a comprehensive influence on Correct pronoun usage
that will
the
maintaining Correct article usage
apply
a
good health for the resident of Remove the article
apply
VinGroup
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Vingroup
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