Using computers everyday can have more negative than positive effects on young children. Do you agree or disagree.

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In today's modern era, everybody is getting dependent on technology.

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kids

are getting addicted

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latest

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gadgets and

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am completely agree

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with the given statement that personal computers have

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impact

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kids

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mental

as well as

physical health. To commence with,

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child is habitual to everyday technologies and

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them excessively.

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kids

use computers to play games more than

studying

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which creates mental stress and strain on

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which impacts health in long run. To elaborate, Childs

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not like to play outside but are addicted to their PlayStations which are creating obesity issues in young lives and

also

costly for parents to manage

such

expenses.

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due to

these

gadgets

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youngsters do not get time to learn or observe something from their parents and lack than others

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their poor communication skills and

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problems.

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Cambridge university United Kingdom done on child mentality shows that

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excessive use of computers, children are becoming less social and their communication ability

also

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a hit which is of profound importance in future for

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, either there will be

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youngsters with managerial abilities in future or in some cases there may be managers without good communication skills in future.

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of the hour to regulate child's usage of modern gadgets

otherwise

it can result in

kids

with shyness which in turn will be

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of confidence.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

248 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Using computers everyday can have more negative than positive effects on young children. Do you agree or disagree.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

Getting promotion is one of the biggest drives for people to apply themselves and work hard in modern workplace. Why do you think people are so driven to get promotion? What other factors influence people to work hard?

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

International organizations should provide developing countries with practical aid and advice rather than financial aid.To what extent do you agree or disagree?