When choosing a job, salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that
job
salary
is the most important
factor
for choosing a career field.
while
I believe that
job
satisfaction
is far more important than other elements, I agree that income is an undeniably significant
factor
. On the one hand,
job
satisfaction
is very important for many reasons. our mental health is really based on our
life
satisfaction
which can be reached by having a proper career.
For example
, since I started painting ,my dream
job
, I have become happier in my
life
and it is easy to see for me that my mental health has improved significantly.
In addition
, in now modern
life
people spend most of their time at their workplace and if they choose it forcefully just in terms of making money it can lead them to depression
which
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I went through the same experience at my
last
job
when I was an engineer.
Hence
, I argue that
job
satisfaction
should be the first career
choosing
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factor
.
On the other hand
,
also
the
job
salary
is an important
factor
that can not be ignored at all. The
salary
should be as enough to make living expenses affordable. To illustrate, Tesla , one of the biggest inventors of all time, did not pay attention to his
job
salary
and he
taken
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his
job
just because of his deepest love for science and electricity, but in his
late
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life
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he became very poor ,
unfortunately
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he passed away just because of poorness. That’s why people should notice their gross income for living. In conclusion, in my opinion ,
job
satisfaction
is very important, but
i
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still believe that
salary
can not be neglected.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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