When choosing a job, salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that
job
salary
is the most important factor
for choosing a career field. while
I believe that job
satisfaction
is far more important than other elements, I agree that income is an undeniably significant factor
.
On the one hand, job
satisfaction
is very important for many reasons. our mental health is really based on our life
satisfaction
which can be reached by having a proper career. For example
, since I started painting ,my dream job
, I have become happier in my life
and it is easy to see for me that my mental health has improved significantly. In addition
, in now modern life
people spend most of their time at their workplace and if they choose it forcefully just in terms of making money it can lead them to depression which
I went through the same experience at my Correct pronoun usage
apply
last
job
when I was an engineer. Hence
, I argue that job
satisfaction
should be the first career choosing
Replace the word
choice
factor
.
On the other hand
, also
the job
salary
is an important factor
that can not be ignored at all. The salary
should be as enough to make living expenses affordable. To illustrate, Tesla , one of the biggest inventors of all time, did not pay attention to his job
salary
and he taken
his Add the auxiliary verb
took
has taken
job
just because of his deepest love for science and electricity, but in his late
Replace the word
later
life
he became very poor ,Add a comma
,life
unfortunately
he passed away just because of poorness. That’s why people should notice their gross income for living.
In conclusion, in my opinion , Add a comma
,unfortunately
job
satisfaction
is very important, but i
still believe that Change the capitalization
I
salary
can not be neglected.Submitted by adelkhoosogol on
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