The charts below describe 4 sectors of employment, in 2009 and 2020, in two towns. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below describe 4 sectors of employment, in 2009 and 2020, in two towns.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts compare the 4
employment
sectors
such
us
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as
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manufacturing, hospitality, engineering, and teaching between 2009 and 2020 in
town
A and in
town
B
. it can be seen that the popular
employment
had been engineering and manufacturing in two towns.
However
, teaching had been lowest
employment
in both towns from 2009 to 2020. First and forest, the
employment
of engineering, which was the highest at 60% in 2009 in
town
A, had been reduced
at
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17% and had been replaced by manufacturing at 60% in 2020. A different situation in
town
B
, the major
employment
, which was manufacturing at 40%, had changed to engineering at 35% in 2020.
Apart from
this
, there was
huge
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a huge
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dump from 60% to 17% in engineering
employment
in
town
A,
whereas
the
employment
of engineering had been same as before in
town
B
.
Moreover
, being a teacher had been
lowest
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and decreased by 1% from 2009 to 2020 in
town
A,
while
in
town
B
even though the
employment
of teaching had been
smallest
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the smallest
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, there was a rise
by
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10% during these 10 years. We
also
can see that the
employment
of hospitality had slightly
grew
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up in both towns by 4% and 5% respectively.
Finally
, engineering and teaching
was
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were
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equal at 20% in
town
B
in 2020.
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