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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

#tourism #benefit #places #time #concern #impact #inhabitants #environment
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last
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one
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decade, it has been noticed that in recent
time
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times
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 more and more
people
 are travelling
different
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to different
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 nations and
culture
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cultures
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. It brings many benefits to local areas of
tourism
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tourist
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places
.
However
, some
people
claiming
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demerits
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the demerits
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 of
tourism
 as it destroys
culture
 and nature. In
this
essay
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 I will describe both positives and negatives of it.
According to
 me
advantages
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the advantages
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 of international
tourism
 is overweighted
it's
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its
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 demerits. On the one hand,
tourism
 brings a lot of job opportunities for local
people
such
 as jobs in hotels, aviation, transport and tour
guide
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guiding
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. As
people
 are coming, they will
have
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need
of
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water and food.
Also
, as a memory of the
place
 they buy some local items from the
place
.
Thus
, domestic
persons
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people
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 can start
their
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apply
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small businesses like stalls for snacks, historical
book shops
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bookshops
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 and corners for handicraft products.
In addition
, it
also
 helps to increase
economy
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the economy
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 of that state or country. Foreigners come to visit
this
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these
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places
 in their leisure time and to
fulfill
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fulfil
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there
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their
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 needs, they will spend their money.
Therefore
, it will increase the lifestyle of the
people
 living
their
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there
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 and
economy
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the economy
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 of the nation becoming stronger. It does not only open up the work opportunity to local ones but
also
representing
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represents
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different
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a different
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culture
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cultures
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.
The peace
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 in the world which is the dream for most of us can be possible by having different
culture
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cultures
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at
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in
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 one
place
 and respecting each other by knowing them and their speciality.
On the other hand
, there are certain natural
places
 which
destroys
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destroy
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 by human intervention.
For instance
, it has been recorded that
from
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for
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last
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the last
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 5
years
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,years
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 the
Himalaya
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Himalayas
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 is slowly and gradually sloping down
due to
 waste produced by tourists and increasing
level
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levels
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 of carbon
diaoxide
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dioxide
.
Moreover
,
at
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in
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 some areas,
spieces
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species
 are migrating from their original
place
 and
as a
result
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,result
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 natural
places
 are losing their essence and beauty. In conclusion, despite having
number
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a number
the number
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 of disadvantages,
its
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it's
it is
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 a great view to support
tourism
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the tourism
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 industry as it brings
a
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apply
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significant work
opportunities
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opportunity
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, infrastructure development,
culture
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cultural
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 transparency and
economy
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economic
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 development.
Thus
, I believe that the boons of
this
 industry are outweighing their banes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enormous benefit
  • impact
  • local inhabitants
  • environment
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • advantages
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • promotion
  • local products
  • environmental impact
  • exploitation
  • resources
  • cultural erosion
  • increased cost of living
  • overcrowding
  • congestion
  • balancing
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
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