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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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last
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one
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decade, it has been noticed that in recent
time
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times
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 more and more
people
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 are travelling
different
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to different
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 nations and
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culture
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cultures
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. It brings many benefits to local areas of
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tourism
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tourist
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places
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.
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, some
people
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claiming
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demerits
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the demerits
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 of
tourism
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 as it destroys
culture
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 and nature. In
this
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essay
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 I will describe both positives and negatives of it.
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advantages
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the advantages
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 of international
tourism
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 is overweighted
it's
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its
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 demerits. On the one hand,
tourism
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 brings a lot of job opportunities for local
people
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such
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 as jobs in hotels, aviation, transport and tour
guide
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. As
people
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 are coming, they will
have
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need
of
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water and food.
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, as a memory of the
place
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 they buy some local items from the
place
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.
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, domestic
persons
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people
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 can start
their
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apply
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small businesses like stalls for snacks, historical
book shops
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bookshops
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 and corners for handicraft products.
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, it
also
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 helps to increase
economy
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the economy
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 of that state or country. Foreigners come to visit
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this
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these
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places
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 in their leisure time and to
fulfill
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there
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their
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 needs, they will spend their money.
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, it will increase the lifestyle of the
people
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 living
their
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there
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 and
economy
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the economy
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 of the nation becoming stronger. It does not only open up the work opportunity to local ones but
also
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representing
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represents
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different
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a different
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culture
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cultures
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.
The peace
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 in the world which is the dream for most of us can be possible by having different
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culture
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cultures
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at
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in
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 one
place
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 and respecting each other by knowing them and their speciality.
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, there are certain natural
places
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 which
destroys
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 by human intervention.
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, it has been recorded that
from
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last
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the last
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 5
years
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,years
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 the
Himalaya
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Himalayas
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 is slowly and gradually sloping down
due to
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 waste produced by tourists and increasing
level
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levels
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 of carbon
diaoxide
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dioxide
.
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,
at
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in
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 some areas,
spieces
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species
 are migrating from their original
place
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 and
as a
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result
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,result
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 natural
places
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 are losing their essence and beauty. In conclusion, despite having
number
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a number
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 of disadvantages,
its
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it's
it is
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 a great view to support
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tourism
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the tourism
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 industry as it brings
a
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apply
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significant work
opportunities
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opportunity
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, infrastructure development,
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culture
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cultural
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 transparency and
economy
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economic
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 development.
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, I believe that the boons of
this
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 industry are outweighing their banes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enormous benefit
  • impact
  • local inhabitants
  • environment
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • advantages
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • promotion
  • local products
  • environmental impact
  • exploitation
  • resources
  • cultural erosion
  • increased cost of living
  • overcrowding
  • congestion
  • balancing
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
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