The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps illustrate an
island
in two appearances before modernization for tourists and after modernization . The first map demonstrates a wild piece of land in the sea almost 250 metres long , with a small number of trees and a beach on the west side of an
island
. On the second
map
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,map
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it can be seen that civilization came to the
island
, it became a tourist resort with many amenities
such
as yachting , a restaurant , two accommodation zones for tourists with
reception
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a reception
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in the centre of the
island
,
new
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a new
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beach with a safe swimming zone .
Also
, people introduced a vehicle track which is connected to the reception and restaurant and many footpaths , which can help people get to the beach from their houses . In conclusion, it can be seen that a wild
island
became an attractive resort for tourists with
accommodation
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accommodations
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and many facilities.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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