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In some areas of world people love to live in traditional lifestyle while in other regions they have a modern living standard. Why it happens? Discuss both views for supporting of your topic.

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Nowadays, some
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 around the world
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 in a conservative approach and others more liberals.
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 essay will discuss why
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 is happening and we will see the topic from every perspective.
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 who grow up in cities have influenced by different cultures and points of view. For ,
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 will be more open and modern.
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, in the Netherlands, they are allowed couples of the same sex to adopt a child which in other parts of more countryside is seen as revolutionary which is the same country.
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,
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 can be from the same country, but grow up in different
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, so they will
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love
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 differently.
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,
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 have different religions which influence their beliefs and the way they seem to
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. Some religions influence a more conservative view.
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, in Catholicism
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 only can go live with their partner when they are married to them. Religion will influence how
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love
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 from a more conservative perspective. In some
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 is important to keep the tradition alive which is important to have a loving approach from generation to generation. For ,others we need to adapt to modern life and that
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 is an important topic.
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, principles happen because of different
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's upbringings. For ,instance
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 who grow up in conservative families will have a more traditional way to
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love
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. In conclusion,
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 can be considered for some
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 more conservative and for others more open mind.
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 is can happen because
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 come from different
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 which influences their beliefs.
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 from cities will have a more open-minded and modern view of
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 rather than
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 living in the countryside. Another aspect is that religion can contribute to a conservative approach.
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