A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism out weight its drawbacks?
Nowadays, the majority of people all around the world spend their leisure time on travel and visiting world civilization heritage in different
countries
. There are variously
Change the word
various
culture
and histories in the world Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
and
attract people to explore Correct word choice
that
it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
Tourism
is a potential business and brings lucrative markets. In the mean time
, Correct your spelling
meantime
tourism
can also
be detrimental if it is not managed correctly.
As a matter of fact, some small countries
need travel
industry because Correct article usage
a travel
of
they could not make the product by Change preposition
apply
self
and depends on import Correct pronoun usage
themselves
form
other Correct your spelling
from
countries
, small island countries
lack of
natural resources and arable land, so it is difficult to develop agriculture and industry on a sufficient scale. In my opinion, the advantages of Remove the preposition
apply
tourism
in modern cities included the tourists bring the economic
and simulation of business, Replace the word
economy
besides
, cultural exchange and sharing the
information Correct article usage
apply
to
foreigners would be a gorgeous way to improve our inclusion and a Diverse Society, we may see the difference between two of us Change preposition
with
then
learning to receive different culture.
Replace the word
than
On the contrary
, the disadvantage of tourism
in
nowadays, I thought Change preposition
apply
it
must be pollution. The phenomenal rate of global warming Correct pronoun usage
apply
are
raising Change the verb form
is
due to
over developed
, much marine debris, smog, Add a hyphen
over-developed
Correct word choice
and deforestations
deforestations
after Fix the agreement mistake
deforestation
much
tourists visited. Correct quantifier usage
many
For example
, in my country Taiwan, the Kenting National Park is a national protect
area, catch Change the form of the verb
protected
fishes
is forbidden, Fix the agreement mistake
fish
nevertheless
, many seafood restaurant
need to provide Change to a plural noun
restaurants
the
fresh dishes for tourists so they catch Correct article usage
apply
fishes
in the national park, the over catch induced coral reef bleaching Fix the agreement mistake
fish
then
relating marine ecology were damaged.
To sum up
, I thought the balance of tourism
should be considered and managed carefully, the law should be done directly, the environment of our living space need
Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
to
sustainable development, Change preposition
apply
the
Correct word choice
and the
economic
Replace the word
economy
also
need
to bolster, I think Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
benefits
of Correct article usage
the benefits
tourism
out weight its drawbacks, so it need to make consensus between government and populaces.Submitted by workthing5421 on
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