In some countries, more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this?

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in a few points of the world, people are interested in knowing about the historical backgrounds of their residence place,
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there are some reasonable rationales, that I will mention
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in
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wants to know about
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of persons who live in their house or apartment,
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so important to know which kind of people choose
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flat and how they design it,
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, it can help them to make a better decision to choose their ideal flat and the decoration they choose. One other question which
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them curious can be the number of family members who lived there, apparently, if you rent a flat, you must know
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it is suitable for how many
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, so knowing about
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either
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it is an adequate flat for you or not.
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, knowing about their job and estimating their income is one another points
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because you will live in the same place with the almost same costs,
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consequently
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, your salary must be approximately the same,
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if you earn half of
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family incomes, with the same family numbers, it is probably harder for you to live there as easy as that family,
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there.
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, the problems that force them to leave there is another vital question. In conclusion,
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, it seems that it is not a good idea to think about
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of
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of your building, there are lots of causes that
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it reasonable to think about it.
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