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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of difgerente cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Music
 has
great
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ability
 to get
attention
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 of
people
 from all over the world
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There
are
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 someone who believes that
music
 is
a
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 best way to gather
people
 without any discrimination of age and
culture
 . I wholly endorse with
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 because of two reasons 
Music
 has got immense power to attract
people
 from various
culture
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cultures
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 and ages
due to
 its
ability
 to make
people
 entertained. Even though there are different types of
music
 which
is
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are
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  popular in the world,
people
 from nooks and corners of
globe
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 are enjoying all formats . It has got a magical
ability
 to make
people
 healthy ,and help them to reduce stress without any boundaries.
For instance
 , Karnatik
music
 from
india
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 has got
lot
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 of fans in western countries and a huge number
Olof
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 participants are attending the
music
 festivals in
india
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India
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 which connects the
culture
 between
india
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India
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 and Europe and give medicinal benefits .
overall
 it's
entertaining
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the entertaining
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ability
 and healthy benefits helping it attractive for all generation
Music
 has got a great
ability
 to exchange ideas and
culture
in
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between
the
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nations and continents and save
the
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knowledge for the future.
Earlier
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 times our forefathers used to exchange knowledge by making
them
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as
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songs or poems
,
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so that
it
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 can be easily memorised and
transfer
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 to
next
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 generation. Nowadays
also
people
 are learning about the history and
culture
 of different parts of the world from
music
 by hearing and assessing . The studies of Hindustani
music
 in
india
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giving
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 a
cast
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 idea of the Mughal invasion and their contributions to
the
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Indian society.
Overall
music
 has
a
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 power to save and transfer knowledge and ideas to upcoming populations. In conclusion ,
music
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 got
a
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 power to entertain
people
 without any differentiations and it can exchange
and
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ideas
of
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 various
culture
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cultures
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 and nations. So I believe that the statement is highly acceptable
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