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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
health
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 care service is a vital department around the globe.Many countries provide free examination and free
health
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 services as well
whereas
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 others do not.
Due to
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 the fact that
treatment
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 procedures
cost
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 expensive when compared with normal medical conditions.Let us scrutinize my aspects as follows.
To begin
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 with, developed countries are having plenty of multispeciality hospitals and advanced technologies that are used to cure patients which can be afforded by the citizens.They get support from the government and insurance at work will help them to pay their medical fees.
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, developing countries do not have many hospitals, most of them located in the city side where rural or remote area people can not access them.Nowadays we are facing instability of financial facts between poor and rich people really threatened needs to be concerned by the government to get free medical
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. The Ministry of
Health
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 should take responsibility for its own citizens by introducing various medical schemes to subsidise at least half of the
treatment
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cost
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 which will save their life.
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, the
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 charged for the latest medical treatments not only covers the procedure
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 but
as well as
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 the hospital invests in establishing medical facilities like adding more bed space,well equipped Intensive care units, Labs and scan units within the hospital and importing advanced technology based equipment to treat patients.In spite of being expensive
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cost
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, the
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 service that cured many serious diseases is considered invaluable. I strongly believe that
health
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 is wealth so, I support that advanced latest medical procedure
cost
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 expensive but it should be taken care of by the government to subsidise it fully or 50 per cent depending on the medical situation involved.
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