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In some countries, it can be difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience. What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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There is no doubt that there are some countries that find it difficult to hire
people
 over the age of 50 in their company at the present time,
although
 they have
great
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 experience.
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, there are different causes and
solutions
 for
this
 problem.
One
 of the causes is not being able to keep up with the conditions of the
work
,
while
one
 of the
solutions
 is trying to make them have a
job
 which is suitable for their age. First of all,
one
 of the most common reasons
of
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 not hiring old
people
 is that they do not have the ability to stick to the intensity of the
work
. Many companies don't determine
certain
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 number of hours for
work
 which is tiring for many
people
, especially old
people
.
For example
, if the company have a chance to hire a young employee or an old employee, it will choose the young
one
 since there is a high probability for them to get
along with
 the
job
 conditions. Another reason is that most of the
work
 nowadays is done
by
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 the help of technology, that's why it might be hard for elder
people
 to get used to using it. It is important to realize that some
solutions
 can be applied to solve
this
 issue. It is essential that more companies should have a team that
help
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 elder
people
 to teach them the hard
work
 requirements. It is equally important for the young employees to help the older ones if they
stuck
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 in a specific matter though. Another key point, companies can allow old workers to make an expert team to teach the young workers the experience they had and some career tips.
To sum up
, aged
people
 may not have
a
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chance to get a
job
 recently because of many reasons. As a matter of fact, some
solutions
 should be taken into account in order to
allowing
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 them to have a constant
job
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age discrimination
  • bias
  • stereotype
  • tech-savvy
  • adaptable
  • retraining
  • upskilling
  • employment regulations
  • job options
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