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More and more families are choosing fast food over home-cooked meals. What are the reasons for this and how can they be addressed?

#families #food #meals
Admittedlly
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Admittedly
,
food
 is a necessity of life. There is a discussion going on, that number of families like to eat junk
food
 more than homemade meals. The causes associated with
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aformentioned
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aforementioned
 notion
along with
 remedies will be enlightened below. To commence with the reasons for the usage of processed
food
. First and foremost is the hectic schedule of
masses
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. Put
this
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simply, people are very busy
on
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 their daily routine chores like jobs and children. They do not have much time to make
food
 for themselves. To exemplify
this
, in many countries like Canada, Australia and England migrant students
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 not have much time for themselves as they have to do
the
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job with their study. So, they opt for processed
food
. In spite of
this
, it become a trend to eat outside the home.
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, folks like to go to restaurants to eat with their family and friends . They find it fashionable to do.
However
, there are
also
 some solutions for it.
Firstly
, there would be the first duty of government. They should spread some awareness among their citizens. They can arrange seminars for them about the detrimental effects of fast
food
 on the human body.
Moreover
, they can
also
 share information on diseases, that can cause
due to
 these oily meals. Despite
this
, mothers can
also
 put some effort into it. They can daily change their
food
 manuals.
Thus
, other family members can eat
home-cooked
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a home-cooked
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meal
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meals
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 with taste.
To conclude
, the hefty workload and trend put much impact on people's eating habits. But, they can change
this
 by different methods.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • On-the-go lifestyle
  • Nutritional value
  • Home-cooked
  • Health consequences
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Meal prep
  • Time management
  • Culinary skills
  • Processed foods
  • Dietary habits
  • Food marketing
  • Value meals
  • Economic factors
  • Lifestyle diseases
  • Cultural shifts
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