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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others ,however,believe that school is the palce to learn this. discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is sometimes thought that school is the perfect place for
kids
 to learn about
values
 in order to become
a good citizens
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.
However
, I hold the same view as
to
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those that believe that
parents
 are great influencers on their kid's
values
. Learning in school is a good way to learn new things and to have a new perspective on
children
's growth. Social skills can be developed in young
people
while
 they are away at home. It is
also
 advantageous to learn good moral conduct for
kids
 with the guidance of their teachers.
Kids
 can
also
 interact with their peers which can build good relationships towards other
people
 and can be a tool to be a good member of society. Some
people
 say that
parents
 are the greatest asset for
kids
' personal growth.
Therefore
,
parents
 can teach their
kids
values
 that can not be thought at school. They can start by teaching their
children
 rules that must abide by.
As a result
,
this
 can let
kids
 learn that they must follow certain rules that they can apply when they grow up.
Parents
 should
also
 show their
children
 good
values
 because young
people
 often mimic adults. In conclusion, both views may be beneficial in teaching young
children
 to be good members of society. I believe that to become a good citizen, one must start at their own home. With that note,
parents
 are responsible for their
children
's
action
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 because
children
 follow the footstep of
the
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every adult they see.
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