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the plan a below shows the ground floor of a particular art gallery in 2005. plan b shows the same area in the present day. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the maps illustrate the developments which have happened on the ground floor of an art
gallery
 since 2005.
overall
, the first floor of
this
 art
gallery
 has witnessed significant changes during the given period. the most noticeable changes are the construction of a lift, temporary exhibitions, children's
area
 and the disappearance of the
gallery
 office,
while
 exhibition rooms 1-3 have remained unchanged.
to begin
 with, to the north of the plan, a lift has been added next to the stairs for the upper floor at present.
in addition
, the
area
 for the cafe and shop has been replaced by a
gallery
 shop and the vending machines have been located under
this
area
instead
 of the
gallery
 office in 2005. moving west, exhibition 4 has been demolished, there is an appearance of temporary exhibitions and a children's
area
instead
.
moreover
, the reception desk has been allocated in the middle of the entrance hall and circle desks have replaced the rectangle ones. a ramp for wheelchairs has
also
 been installed beside the steps to the entrance. remarkably, exhibition rooms 1-3 on the west side have stayed unchanged throughout the period.
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