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Nowadays in many countries young people don’t communicate with older people as much as they used to. Why is this happening? How could this situation be improved?

In the current world,
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 have been changing rapidly, affecting relationships between older
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 and teenagers.
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 essay will explain the reasons for
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 problem, and I will give logical solutions for
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 circumstance. One of the reasons is the big gap between
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 because of technological developments. The elderly and youths do not have habits that they are doing together.
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, in the past, tv had the most significant activity for all family members. During specified times, families watch movies or series because there are no options better than
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, there are numerous choices and facilities, so all
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 do not want to watch together. In
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 way, older
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 can not have strong relationships, and young
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 do not want to communicate.
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, living style is changing.
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 used to live with all family members
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 as uncles, aunts, grandparents etc.
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,
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's relationships were strong, but nowadays,
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 want to live alone, so
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 can not create communication with the elderly. From my point of view,
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 should do some things to solve
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 issue which is to teach
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 to communicate with older
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 with parents, and the old generation should try to find the same habits. First of all, parents should teach and show how to communicate with the elderly because
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 can learn
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,
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 learn respect for these
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.
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, old
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 should try to communicate because if the old person's impression is not suitable for
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 moving to communicate, young
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 can not try it.
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,
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 travelling by bus, if old
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 illustrate the face of uncommunicative, young
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 just sit, and they can not do it.
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, two groups of
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 should learn these things.
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, everything that has been stated so far, because of the changing habits, young
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 do not want to communicate with the elderly. To solve
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 problem, both
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 should do something which parents give education to
children
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 and old
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 should find the same point to communicate.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Generational gap
  • Technological advancements
  • Social media
  • Face-to-face communication
  • Tech-savvy
  • Urbanization
  • Busy lifestyles
  • Cultural shifts
  • Elder respect
  • Educational pressures
  • Career pressures
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