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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative effect ?

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In the present age, people's choices have changed a lot because of advancements in technology. It is observed in many nations that youngsters nowadays prefer to live alone
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 of residing with their families. I completely disagree with
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 idea and
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 essay will support my opinion with examples. First of all, living alone means there is a person to talk with.
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, people do not have anyone to share their feelings and they have to live without sharing them with others.
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 community feels depressed for almost all ages.
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, In the UK, there was a huge spike in mental health issues in the young generation in recent years.
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, In
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fast pace
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 age, people may get sick easily or have a medical emergency suddenly. These situations do not have any prior sign and do significant damage to the person.
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, There was a student who suffered a paralysis attack and may not be able to recover fully as he did not receive treatment on point.
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,
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 situations may result in irreparable damages if proper treatment is not received at the moment. Alternatively, Youngsters get the freedom to follow their choices and
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 have more privacy and time if they live alone. They do not have to follow a schedule defined by the family. As an example, they
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 to wash their clothes daily.
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 time can be used for some productive activities. In summary, I would concede that residing alone may have some benefits but it has more drawbacks. As far as I am concerned, I believe teenagers should not live alone and they should live with their families.

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task response
Ensure that the introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic and outlines the main points that will be discussed in the body of the essay. The conclusion should summarize the main points and provide a clear restatement of your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical structure of the essay by organizing your ideas in a more coherent manner. Use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas and create a logical flow throughout the essay.
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Provide specific examples and evidence to support your ideas. Ensure that the examples are relevant to the main points and effectively illustrate your arguments.
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