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The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph provides information about the number of
passengers
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 who use the Underground Station in London.
Overall
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, the figure has experienced a slight upward trend,
while
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 it has fluctuations over the timetable. When we look at the line graph in detail, 100
passengers
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 use the Station at 6.00. The number sharply increases during the next two hours, and it peaks at 400
passengers
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.
Then
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, during the next two hours, it significantly drops to about 170
passengers
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. From 10.00 to 14.00, the figure fluctuates, and it does not change too much that increasing from almost 200
passengers
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 to about 220
passengers
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. When we look at the rest of the graph in detail, the number of
passengers
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 goes deep to approximately 370
passengers
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 at 18.00. After the rush hours, the figure dramatically goes down,
that is
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 a bit more than 100
passengers
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 at 20.00.
Finally
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, The underground Station has almost 150
passengers
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 at 22.00 respectively.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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