Poor nutrition and obesity is a problem in many developed countries and some people believe that a tax on fast food would reduce the problem. Do you agree?
Nowadays fast food is considered the main cause of obesity.
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disease influences only their appearance, it actually has more severe consequences which affect health, Linking Words
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problem requires an immediate solution. Society supposes that taxation would improve the situation and I firmly advocate Linking Words
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essay will provide arguments for my point of view.
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To begin
with, the main audience of fast food restaurants are teenagers, who usually do not have a well-paid job and Linking Words
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money from their parents. Correct subject-verb agreement
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age group selects restaurants based on their financial abilities. Linking Words
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, the youth often do not look after their health properly and Linking Words
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not notified about the aftermaths of the lack of essential vitamins and elements. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
For instance
, students in the breaks prefer to visit places, where they are able to eat inexpensively and swiftly, in order to not be late for the next class.
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, from the economic approach, when there is a rise in prices on one market, in Linking Words
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case, because of the taxes, the public will buy goods substitutes, videlicet healthier meals. The quantity demanded of fast food will decrease and Linking Words
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provokes an increased supply of organic products, which results in the rise of competition in the market and leads to a drop in prices. Linking Words
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contributes to the solution of the poor nutrition problem, because more people can afford to purchase decent eating. Linking Words
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, with the farmers' product costs declining more people will be able to eat well at home.
In conclusion, from the arguments and examples given, I strongly believe that taxation would influence the situation in a positive way.Linking Words
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