The bar chart shows the difficulties people have when they move to a new country and how the problems vary according to people’s ages.

The bar chart shows the difficulties people have when they move to a new country and how the problems vary according to people’s ages.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of problems faced by
people
during transfer to the other country depending on a different
age
. The old
people
above 55 years old show a higher value above 50% with the new language in that country .Where the adult
age
is between approximately 35% and the younger little one.
according to
social life and making new friends the bar shows 40% of ages between 18-34 and
also
adult
people
may seem to be equal to each other ,but for older ,
people
its complicated may just reach 22%.
on the other hand
, when looking for accommodation will see that younger and adult
people
may face a higher per cent between 38% to 40% ,and for older ,
age
it may easily and little difficult about 20% . in conclusion , the high level of that complicated my face the older
age
in the language and making friends, on the other ,hand easy to find a place in the country with them.
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