In many countries children are engaged in some kid of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong,while other consider it as valuabl work .what is your opinion?

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, they suppose to enjoy their hobbies like swimming, reading books, hang out with friends to develop their wide range of experiences. They could get mature through lots of experiences even though It does not include paid
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • responsibility
  • time management
  • financial literacy
  • economic necessity
  • less economically developed
  • additional income
  • ethical concerns
  • exploitation
  • unsafe working conditions
  • physical and mental well-being
  • rights protected
  • balance
  • light, age-appropriate employment
  • education or leisure time
  • primary responsibilities
  • legal and ethical considerations
  • child labor laws
  • voluntary
  • age-appropriate
  • children's development
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