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Crime rates will fall as advances in technology make it easier to detect and prevent crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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recent years, the community raised concerns about the
crime
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 rate in suburban areas. Some people advocate the need for
technology
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 in the area.
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, it might bring a negative trend to
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 and the residents will feel more secure in the area. from my personal view, I totally agree that the innovations of digital devices do bring benefits to
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, especially
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. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the subjects by demonstrating examples and my standpoint.
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, the rate of
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 in the nation has highly impacted public lifestyles. The claim
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technology
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 will demerit lawlessness activities .
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, surveillance cameras, detection sensors and others.
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, the unlawful
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 will be more hesitant to
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due to
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 the
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 in place. These can bring benefits to our
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.
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,
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 fully committed to the latest automation in their surveillance and can randomly recognise people by using cameras.
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, if a person steals a wallet at a cultural event. The rate of resolving the case with
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 is up to 80%.
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, cameras can detect the person's footage and be able to track the person down instantly, these are the reasons that
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 could be a great support for combating unlawful activities.
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, advanced digital devices do bring ample convenience and benefits to
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. We just need to be smart in using them and navigate the full functions of the devices. I reiterate that modern technologies do bring advantages to
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 especially unlawful activities.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a separate main point with clear topic sentences and supporting details. Use transition words to show the connection between ideas.
task response
Provide a more balanced view that considers counterarguments and different perspectives. Ensure that you fully address the prompt by discussing both the advantages and potential limitations of technology in crime prevention.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime deterrent
  • high-tech surveillance
  • facial recognition systems
  • omnipresence
  • deter
  • digital forensics
  • ballistic testing
  • revolutionize
  • exonerate
  • root causes
  • social inequality
  • invasion of privacy
  • civil liberties
  • surveillance
  • data collection
  • negative implications
  • cybercrime
  • hacking
  • identity theft
  • online fraud
  • cybersecurity
  • vulnerabilities
  • exploit
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