You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and after look after their six year old child. Write a letter the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the Job

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Dear Mr and Mrs Brown, My name is Celine Chan. I am writing with regard to your advertisement published in the " Jobs" magazine

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week and I would like to live with your family for the coming six months and look after your kid. I am studying at the University of Hong Kong and majoring in tourism. Currently, I am taking a gap year and I would like to widen my horizon by visiting different countries around the world and

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about different cultures. I think it would be a great opportunity for me to learn about the Australian culture if I could stay with your family. As I have been to other eight countries

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share my experiences with you and your child. I consider myself a most suitable candidate as I am experienced in taking care of children. I have been volunteering in taking care of underprivileged children in my hometown during my free time since I was 18 years old. With the background of studying psychology as one of my elective subjects in the university, I could communicate well with children and understand how to handle their emotions,

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, I may take good care of your child during my stay. Thank you for your time and consideration. Please feel free to contact me if you need

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details and recommendations. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Celine Chan

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