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some people think that goverment should spend public money on saving minority languages.Others,however,believe that would be a waste of public money. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #goverment #money #minority #languages #waste
Today,the
minority
population
is decrease
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 from time to time.Some
community
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communities
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 believe that
goverments
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governments
government
 should spend public
bill
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bills
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 on saving
minority
 languages,
while
 others believe that would be a
waste
 of public cash.
This
 essay will show discuss both
this view
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these views
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 and give my own opinion. On
yhe
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the
 one hand,
goverments
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governments
government
 should
public
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the public
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 pay
oon
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on
 saving
minority
 languages has several reasons.The first is that if
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 helps minorities,the
minority
population
 will decrease.
Moreover
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 their culture is lost. Now
society
 is a multicultural
society
.So we have to need different cultures.The second is that the
minority
 has a lot of history. Mabey
minority
 history is very important to
society
.
However
, we do not understand
minority
 languages.So if the
minority
 is lost,we can not get a
minority
 word
can
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and can
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 not get a
minority
 style.
On the other hand
, others believe that would be
waste
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a waste
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 of public
money
.
This
 opinion has several reasons.The first reason is that
minority
language
 does not need in
society
 because the
minority
population
 is a few and most
population
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populations
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 can not
undersatand
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understand
there
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their
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language
.
In addition
,
minority
 public
are
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is
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 not to work in
society
. They live
mountains
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in mountains
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 and so on.So if a
minority
 word can not understand us, we do not have problems. In conclusion,some
population
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populations
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 believe government should spend public
wage
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wages
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 on saving minorities because they are beautiful
culture
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cultures
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.So we have to save their
language
.
While
 others believe that would be a
waste
 of public
money
 because we can not understand their vocabulary and
they
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their
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apply
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 can not work in
society
.In my own opinion that if
government
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the government
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 uses public capital on saving minorities, it would be a
waste
 of public
money
 because if they apply
language
 is lost,we do not have
effect
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an effect
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 on life and
government
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the government
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 should spend
bill
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bills
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 on
another things
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another thing
other things
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.
Society
 has a lot of problems and they need a lot of
money
.
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