Nowadays people moving to other countries for work. Some people say that it is difficult for children lives, others think that it is better for them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Studying and working aboard have been more and more prevalent and the general public has a multitude of views about
this
phenomenon.
While
some people may think that it is difficult for
children
to live aboard, I personally believe the disadvantages of working in other countries are outweighed by its advantages. On one hand,
children
may face huge challenges when they live aboard. Living
aboard
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is a huge challenge for
children
and teenagers as they are still at a tender age and they may not be able to adapt to the foreign environment quickly without their parent's guidance and help.
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could be another significant and common problem. They may not be able to communicate with people effectively and feel frustrated when they have to acquire new skills using a foreign language.
Moreover
, they may be discriminated against by the local students or workers and they may have to encounter difficulties when they wish to integrate into new social groups. In extreme cases, there may be even bullying which may pose tremendous pressure on
children
and is detrimental to their development.
On the other hand
, there is a myriad of advantages
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living in foreign countries. The most significant advantage is that the independency of kids will be improved. Currently, many
children
are spoiled by their parents and take everything for granted. When they are living alone in other countries, they may need to take care of themselves and learn to do different household tasks like washing clothes,cooking dishes and doing chores. Essential life skills in turn will be developed. Another benefit is that
children
may widen their horizons. As the foreign culture may be diametrically opposed to their own culture, their horizon will be broadened and they may learn how to appreciate and respect others' cultures. They may no longer be stubborn and think that their own culture is the best ,
instead
, their mind will be opened.
Although
children
may find difficulties in living abroad, I still believe that it has a lot of positive effects on
children
's development.
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