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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table shows figures for the underground
railways
Change to a genitive case
railway's
railways'
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system
 in six cities, these figures include when
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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the railways opened, the length of the route and passengers per year.
Overall
,
London
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London's
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 underground
railway
system
 has the longest route in six cities,
while
 it is the oldest
railway
system
. The
most busy
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busiest
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railway
system
 is Tokyo underground
railway
system
, which had 1927 million passengers per year. Looking at the details. These subway systems were up and running from 1863 to 2001
seperately
Correct your spelling
separately
. The first to start operation is London Underground and the
last
 to start operation is Los Angeles Underground. There are four metro systems with more than 100 km
railway
Change preposition
of railway
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 route, they are London, Paris, Tokyo and Washington DC
railway
 systems. From the perspective of passenger flow, the figure shows Tokyo's 1927 million passengers per year made it
first
Correct article usage
the first
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 one.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words system, railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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