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6.0 People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. What are the causes of this problem? How to overcome it?

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Most
people
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 indeed fail in the quest to achieve
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work
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life
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balance
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 despite trying very hard. There are many reasons for
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 imbalance, but a few steps can be taken to achieve
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work
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life
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balance
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. The main reason for the inability to achieve a
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work
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balance
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 is that jobs have become stressful and competition at
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 forces
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 to
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 harder and longer than others. Technology has
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 made everyone more reachable and
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 constant connection to
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 has reduced the
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people
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 get to relax at home. Another culprit for
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 lack of
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 is the materialistic society of today.
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 care more about the luxuries of
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 than spending
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 with loved ones.
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, the higher cost of living has forced some
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 to
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 more and take on second jobs. There are many steps
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 can take to lessen their workload and achieve a healthier
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life
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,
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 need to set realistic and manageable goals at
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. Prioritizing important tasks and eliminating or delegating other tasks will not only save
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 but
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 make
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 feel more accomplished.
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, individuals should consider asking employers for flexible
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 hours and telecommuting options.
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 would increase their productivity and give them more
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 to spend with families at home.
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, a healthy lifestyle is essential to coping with stress and to achieving
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work
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balance
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 need to start eating well, include physical activity in their daily routines and get enough sleep.
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, when
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 come home from
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, they must learn to switch the office button off and
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 do relaxing hobbies that take their mind off
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 like reading, gardening, hiking etc.
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 but not least, downshifting, which means reducing one's standard of
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 for an improved quality of
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, would result in more spare
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 and reduced workloads.
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, heavier workloads create a
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 imbalance but certain strategies can help
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 rectify
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 situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: the equilibrium between one's job responsibilities and personal life.
  • Overwork: working too hard or for excessive amounts of time.
  • Remote work: working from a location other than the central work office, often from home.
  • Flexible working hours: work hours that are adaptable to suit an employee's needs.
  • Commuting: traveling between one's home and workplace.
  • Digital technology: electronic tools and systems used to generate, store, and process data, often leading to increased connectivity.
  • Disconnect: to detach from technology or work communications, often to establish boundaries.
  • Time management: the ability to use one's time effectively or productively.
  • Prioritize: to determine the order for dealing with tasks according to their importance.
  • Employer support: programs or practices employed by an organization to assist employees in managing work and personal roles.
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