You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think that going to a fitness centre regularly is unnecessary. Instead, they believe that combining occasional exercise (such as going for walks) with a balanced diet is enough to stay healthy. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words

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Some
people
may think going to a
gym
on a weekly basis is not necessary, and they believe that
people
can maintain health with leisure exercise
such
as going for a walk occasionally and a
balance
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balanced
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diet daily.
However
, I believe that going to a
gym
regularly is
beneficial
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more beneficial
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for health than doing occasional exercise at
home
. On the one hand,
people
may think there are various ways to keep our lives
health
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healthy
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instead
of participating
gym
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in gym
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centers
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centres
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regularly.
People
can search for resources regarding how to
exercises
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exercise
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at
home
occasionally,
such
as doing
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a workout
the workout
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workout
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workouts
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, yoga, and aerobic activities online. They
also
can receive
the
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apply
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knowledge regarding how to prepare healthy food online. They can do
exercises
at
home
in their spare time without money and geographic barriers,
as well as
prepare healthy meals.
However
,
on the other hand
, I believe that attending a fitness
center
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centre
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is more beneficial than self-management at
home
.
Firstly
, it can easily maintain an exercise routine when going to a
gym
. To
further
elaborate, because
people
need to pay membership fees for fitness
centers
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centres
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, they usually force themselves and have higher motivation to
exercises
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exercise
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to make it
as
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apply
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a weekly routine.
Also
, if
people
go to gyms, they can utilize various equipment and facilities, and meet
people
with
same
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the same
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interests
with
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as
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them.
Moreover
,
people
can easily receive professional and customized advice from trainers regarding their
exercises
and daily diet. In conclusion, even
thought
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though
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some
people
may think it is possible to maintain
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle without going to gyms, I do believe that participating
fitness
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in fitness
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centers
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centres
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regularly is more
advantages
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advantageous
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than self-management.
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