The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the percentage of
school
children attending four different types of secondary
school
from 2000 to 2009. It is evident that
whereas
the community
schools
experienced a marked increase in the proportion of those attending their institutions over the period, the others saw a corresponding decline.
To begin
, the percentage of pupils in voluntary-controlled
schools
fell from just over half to only 20% or
one fifth
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from 2000 to 2009.
Similarly
, the relative number of children in grammar
schools
- just under one quarter - dropped by half in the same period. As for the specialist
schools
, the relatively small percentage of pupils attending
this
type of
school
(12%)
also
fell,
although
not significantly.
However
,
while
the other three types of
school
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schools
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declined in importance, the opposite was true in the case of community
schools
. In fact,
whereas
only a small minority of 12% were educated in these
schools
in 2000,
this
figure increased to well over half of all pupils during the following nine years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, schools with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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