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The graph displays how often citizens in the USA consumed fast-food in restaurants from 2003 to 2013.

The graph displays how often citizens in the USA consumed
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fast-food
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 in restaurants from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
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, most
people
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 in the USA ate
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fast-food
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 once a week and once or twice a month throughout the whole year,
whereas
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people
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 who consumed every day and never category had the lowest
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.
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 with, citizens in the USA who went to
fast-food
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 restaurants once a week increased from 2003 to 2006 (over 30%) before decreasing to around 27% in 2013.
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,
people
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 who tended to consume
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fast-food
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 once or twice a month experienced a high
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, reaching 30% in 2003 and the peak was more than 30% in 2013.
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,
people
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 who ate either every day or never
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fast-food
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 showed the smallest
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 below 5%,
although
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 the never category in 2003 stood at 5%.
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, citizens choosing to eat
junk-food
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 several times a week reached 20% in 2006 and it showed a decline
by
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 5% in 2003. The
percentage
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 of
people
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 who consumed
fast-food
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 a few times a year between 2006 and 2013 remained at 15%, going up from around 12% in 2003.

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