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The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture of the
process
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 illustrates aluminium
cans
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 , which were recycled.
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, the
process
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 consists of seven main steps and it can be divided into two
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part
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. The first
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 is brief about the collection period of
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process
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 and the second one
,
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 is about recycling. The first steps start when the can which was used,
it
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is
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thrown
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 into a special rubbish bin to recycle it . When all of the old
cans
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has
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 been collected by
combined
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 machine, it
delivered
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 to the factory. Where it takes four little steps of cleaning. After being cleaned , sorted , shredded and compressed the first
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finished
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. The second
part
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 start when pressed materials of
cans
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 are heated and melted. After the
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 of rolling melted materials , it becomes 2.5 mm to 6mm thick.
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 Thick has been recycled and transformed into new
cans
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 with 74% indicates of recycled materials and has been named as Reusing

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, cans, part with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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