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These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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The demand
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 becoming a teacher at schools, primarily secondary schools, has been decreasing
day-to-day
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. There are some reasons why young people do not want to make a career in
a
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 teaching field and the
government
 should take prompt action to mitigate these problems in several ways Some key factors may influence not to choose
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 a teacher. First of all, teenagers who are studying at school would be
badly-behaved
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while
 they tend to make trouble
by
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 bad words and character.
This
 makes teachers'
job
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jobs
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 stressful or exhausting.
Secondly
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 people working at school cannot earn a high salary to provide
their
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family
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families
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.
Finally
, there may be problems with supplying necessary educational tools
such
 as new devices for teaching language or some stuff for chemistry and biology lessons
On the other hand
, the
government
 will attempt to encourage
young
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 generation to become a teacher One beneficial way is
increasing
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 their income. If they are provided with a well-paid
job
,
it
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they
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 will be highly unlikely to quit the
job
 or change. Another important approach is that the
government
 needs to launch a campaign to boost
their
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its
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 reputation in the local community by making TV shows or
movie
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movies
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 on TV.
Last
 but not least, many
job
 opportunities are offered to teachers
such
 as trips to foreign countries and free state services. In conclusion, some reasons cause having no desire to prefer teaching and the
government
 has to fix these problems.
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